Biography

So, this is the biography I mentioned in my last entry. You can read more about the competition I’m writing it for here

Please read and give me feedback. I need to make it as professional as I can so any advice you have will help.

Thanks in advance.

Will

About the writer:

William Forbes is 29 years old. Born and raised in Aberdeen, he moved to Middlesbrough in September 1999 to study Psychology and Criminology at the University of Teesside and still lives there. He did not complete the course as he realised it was not what he wanted to do. Since then he has obtained a City and guilds in TV and Video Production at Middlesbrough College and has just finished an FdA TV and Film Production course at Cleveland College of Art and Design. In addition he has a University Certificate in Professional Development Introduction to screenwriting from the University of Teesside. William is unemployed at the moment and has not yet had anything professionally produced. His interests include films, television, watching football, watching ice hockey, writing, cross stitch and cross stitch design and the internet.

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August 22, 2007

I don’t think you should simply say “didn’t finish the course because it wasn’t what you wanted to do”. Give a reason. Say something like… “after discovering an aptitude for scriptwriting, Will left his Psychology studies to focus on his passion.” Or something like that. Also, do you need to say you’re unemployed and haven’t had anything produced? If so, make it sound less negative… cont…

August 22, 2007

I don’t think you should simply say “didn’t finish the course because it wasn’t what you wanted to do”. Give a reason. Say something like… “after discovering an aptitude for scriptwriting, Will left his Psychology studies to focus on his passion.” Or something like that. Also, do you need to say you’re unemployed and haven’t had anything produced? If so, make it sound less negative… cont…

August 22, 2007

… sorry to be so pushy. I just don’t think you’re making yourself sound as brilliant as you are. 🙂 xo

August 22, 2007

… sorry to be so pushy. I just don’t think you’re making yourself sound as brilliant as you are. 🙂 xo

i agree with the above noter – i don’t think you need to mention that you’re unemployed. i also think you should change the reason you didn’t finish the course to what findingsunshine said.

i agree with the above noter – i don’t think you need to mention that you’re unemployed. i also think you should change the reason you didn’t finish the course to what findingsunshine said.