Day 9 of 24/7

Day 9 already! Can you believe it? I’ve been playing with another poetry format that I’ve never tried before, and I have another one lined up for tomorrow or a later day. This one is a cinquain. The format has to do with syllable count per line, being 2, 4, 6, 8, 2. The images come from the backstory of the Folk. Those of you who have read Torin’s saga from the beginning are well acquainted with the Folk as they exist in Torin’s world, and I’ve hinted from time to time of their past. This little poem describes the fate of their home planet, and the ones who weren’t able to escape by jumping to parallel realities.

Nova

The sun
huge in the sky
oceans steam in the heat
whole forests erupting in flames
we burn

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I tried it in past tense "oceans steamed in the heat/whole forests erupted in flames/we burned", but I  think present tense works better. What do you think? I do value your input.