Poetry: Left Untold

Left Untold
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I feel his reprimand
Creeping through your eyes —
Behind the vacancy
Of his child-born lies.

In sync and runnning
These thoughts still do flow;
A blink of cunning
Lets these emotions go.

I need to recite
The poems of this place —
I need to invite
Your hands ’round my face.

In certainty I do know
Of the sacrifice you’ve made —
In sanctity you’ll grow
From the grasp you’ve laid.

Behind closed doors
Is where all is told —
From sun, from moon,
Our story’s untold.

Beautiful

RYN: Thanks for the support, it helps!! -Jocelyn

I like the way you write. Wonder how the story ends.

Annabell

February 19, 2004

You never cease to amaze me with your writing. It’s such an inspiration.

Green Eyed

the poem made me smile

Lonely Aphredite

This one is REALLY good…

Heavens ~Dew~

YOU KEEP ON WRITING THESE GOOD POEMS THAT JUST HAVE ME ON THE EDGE OF MUH SEAT, AND IMMA FALL COMPLETELY OVER … LOL … I THINK THAT MAY HURT THOUGH, THE FLOOR IS KINDA HARD, HEHE … BUT HEY IT’S WELL WORTH IT … RYN: YOU ARE MORE THAN WELCOME …

it only takes a three letter word to describe that peom….*wow*. I thought it was wonderful. Hehe from me in OP!

Scorpio

February 20, 2004

🙂

February 24, 2004

i like alot…very well done…

endangeredreams

your poetry flirts with cliche and dances with the tawdry, but is wildly sucessful in its concepts and lyrical in its exicution. normally i dont go for this style, but youve pulled it off well