so far

this is how my story is going so far…

A Day in My Sisters Stilettos

By: Alessandra Coronel

 

“Why would u sit on my bed when you’re covered in grass stains and mud.” Caroline asked. Danielle ignored her identical twin sister and walked over to her bed. She said, “You act like it’s the end of the world if something gets a little dirty. A mean seriously your bed cover is green so no one will notice a little green smudge.” “Well excuse me for being clean. I bet u couldn’t go one day without getting dirty.” Caroline said. Danielle knew Caroline was probably right but instead she said, “I bet u couldn’t last 10 minutes out on the soccer field.” Caroline eyed her sister. “Would u like to put two weeks of chores where your mouth is?” “Fine one week we trade places, on one condition, we have to teach each other about ourselves so you don’t ruin my reputation and I don’t ruin yours. Deal?” Caroline paused unsure weather to take the deal. If she didn’t her sister would call her a coward. “Deal.” they shook each others hand having no idea that this week would be the hardest week of their life.

 

i think its going pretty good!

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September 19, 2006

sounds good…almost sounds like the parent trap only they know about each other in the beginning….good luck…im add u to my fas…maybe keep readind if you keep posting

September 19, 2006

It is decent. I might give a bit more of an introduction though. Like: As she walked into her bedroom that she shared with her twin sister Danielle, Caroline noticed her sitting on her bed. Or something to that effect, will help readers understand the situation a bit more first. How long does this story have to be?

September 19, 2006

i like it but you might want to be carefull because it sounds like this mary kate and ashley movie i saw. You dont want to get in trouble for stealing someone elses work. I’m not saying you are. You never know what the teacher might think.

September 20, 2006

lol. it does sound like parent trap. but i would watch the movie or read the book. good job!