First Short-short
I’m not doing these in any particular order. I was looking at all notes today, reading over the opening sentences, looking for spins to put on them and this one jumped out at me waving its conclusion and shouting “Me, me! Pick me!” I’ve italicized the prompt itself, and here it is, courtesy of Wingèd Medusa:
As she stood there holding the broken doorknob, she resigned herself to the possibility that this day wasn’t going to get any better. “Aw, crap!” She tried to grab the metal stub that poked its tongue into the room from the door. If she could reattach the knob to the spindle, she would be able to get out of her bedroom and maybe even make it to her new job in time.
The tip of her tongue poked from the corner of her mouth, unnoticed. “Come to Mamma,” she murmured to the ridged metal. It wiggled in the door, but seemed to be holding. She put the open end of the knob on the spindle and pushed gently. A thud came from the carpeted hall on the other side of the door. “Damn you!” She held the knob in her hand and stared at the hole in the door where the other part had been. She thudded her head on the door. “Noooooooo. Please let me out! Please. It’s the best job everrrrrrrrr.” A whining tone had entered her voice. “This so sucks!”
She sat on the edge of the bed for a few minutes, wondering how she was ever going to get out of this stupid bedroom, in the stupid old-fashioned apartment which, until this morning, had been her pride and joy. Her eyes searched the room. There–on the dressing table–a nail file. She bounced from the bed, seized the nail file and dropped to her knees in front of the door. Careful manipulation rewarded her with a faint click and the door swung open.
“Yes!” She pulled it open the rest of the way, flung the nail file at the dresser, and hurried out into the hallway. Her foot came down on the other knob, which rolled away. The movement twisted her ankle and she fell. “DAMMITALLTOHELL!” Pain throbbed up her leg. She almost wept with frustration. The new job in the heart of the city, the big break in the world of business, the realization of her dream–all the hopes were fading fast. She struggled to her feet and hobbled to the living room. What to do? What to do?
She couldn’t walk down to the subway station now, that was for sure. She’d have to call in on her first day and plead sick. She hoped they would be understanding. She clicked on the TV, and reached for the phone and her purse with the business card and number of her new boss. The line buzzed and wouldn’t connect. She tried again. A busy signal. What the heck? She hung up the phone and stared at the TV. The image made no sense. She stared. Flames billowed from the tower, black smoke filled the sky. Confetti, or so it seemed, swirled in the air. The camera angle changed. What movie was this? She turned up the sound.
“A plane has flown into the north tower of the World Trade Center…” The north tower. Her new job, up on the 98th floor. She stared, eyes wide.
Wow! That was unexpected!
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Very well done. I know a few people who had very nearly that experience that day. And are struggling with it still.
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ohhhhhhh!! Gave me head goosebumps! VERY nicely done.
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whoaaa.. i was experiencing her frustration till i came to the end… what a shock! good story, and it sort of reminds me of the times things seem to be going totally against us, when all along we may be saved from a greater disaster ~
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whoa! nicely done …
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:-O Shock!
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above was me… stupid op not lettin me sign notes
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Fate. I’d like to say that I don’t believe in it, but I do 🙂
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That story is soooooo kool it was awsome love #2 Doughter
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it’s a great story! i was in bronx that day that day has become a day that i will never forget and you have made this day even better.
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Very good indeed
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what oh….. This is going to be interesting.
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Whoa. That’s not what I expected at all. I’m glad I could help you out with a creative “jumpstart.” I have to say, I’m impressed with the results.
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That was so good! I liked the surprising twist at the end. Makes you think that maybe the delay happened for a reason. *with a thoughtful smile & warm hug*
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Isn’t it wonderful when the Universe won’t listen to us??????? Great story! Really loved it!!! You are tooooooo awesome! SW, the unrepentantly unsigned
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wow… i always found myself wondering after that day… if there were people that were supposed to be at work that called in sick (just to go out shopping), got a late start because of car/husband/wife/children/pet problems… people that got stuck in some sort of paranormal traffic jam. *humorless chuckle*
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and then, I wonder about those that swapped shifts and days off with coworkers that they were good friends with. The way so many people’s lives have changed is amazing in this horrific way… some people died because of it, some people wish they had died because of it… and some people are dying in a different way because of it… ~Lady Jade, not signed in~
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Wonderfully done. Tension upon tension, then that sudden kick in the chest.
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Always love a twist. little bird
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Major goosebumps….excellent… Warm Smiles,
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very well done. jule
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I had thought about the people who some how didn’t go there and here was a very good story about it
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My SO’s sister was on a cruise or she’d have been in the building right across the street. They broke into the “entertainment” with the story on big screen..the whole ship fell into awed silence, punctuated with his sister’s weeping. My marriage ended that day. Another life began. So many lives were changed in so short a time. Very well written, I am weeping thinking of that day.
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