The Guild… brainstorm session 1

alright here we go. i have most of the idea for the next part of the story. you’ve all been introduced to the villian, Curare. Now the next part is going to be the introduction of the hero and his friends. the hero’s name is Jack. or Killian Jack. He wants to be part of the Assassin’s Guild. Curare was part of the assassins guild, but was let go because he was too dangerous and scary. the guild wants him dead because he has been going around killing all theses kings for an unkonw kingdom, which is become invreasingly bigger. dangerously bigger. jack finds his way to the guild, but because of all the shit going down with Curare they don’t let him join, and they don’t want to have to deal with him, so they set him up by sending him to who they know is the next king on Curare’s hitlist. Hoping that a) either Curare will kill this kid and ease that problem, or b) by some miracle, Jack will kill Curare and end that much bigger problem. Either way they are going to have one of their best also present to kill whoever the survivor is. I think their best is going to be one of those characters that shows up at the most inoportune times and fuck everything up for everyone, or maybe just comic relief… i haven’t really decided yet. either way, jack and curare do meet at the kill spot, and insted of the king dying, jack is going to stop Curare from killing him. his morals are going to get in the way and he’s going to stop it from happening. at this point, Curare is going to be so pissed that he makes it a point htat beofre everything else is over, he’s going to kill jack for ruining his kill. Jack at this point realizes that he was setup by the guild, finds out about the political bullshit with the unknown kingdom, and is now number one on the hitlist of the most feared assassin in the world. so the rest of the story is him trying to figure out how to bring down the corrrupt assassins guild, stop the rise of the empire and survive.
now i am the kind of guy that always feels that the villian should win, or at least not lose. but, i don’t want jack to die. so, at the end of the story, jack is going to lose something very dear to him, and curare is going to walk away. as for the guild and the political bullshit, it probably won’t be resolved till later. what i want to happen, what the plan is right now, is at one point, there is going to be a seduction scene played out between jack, curare and jacks’ best friend. jack’s best friend is jealous and angry that he is not jack. he’s not as good or skilled. he’s the second best in that group of friends, but not as good as jack and as such that is a matter of personal grief for him. so in this seduction scene, (think darth vader and luke skywalker from empire strikes back) curare is going to owrk on both characters, but focus on the best friend when he realizes the jealousy and hidden rage that he harbors toward jack. at the end of the book, in the final confrontation, jack willl beat curare but instead of killing him, the friend is going to stop him and save curare and run off with him to be his pupil. at least that’s the idea. and tha’ts going to be the end of the first book. because that is a great way to end it, in my opinion.
now i know i just gave away a shitload of what i want to happen, but if i’m a good enough writer then, hopefully, it’ll still get the feeling of betrayal and shock that i want. so i’m effectively challenging myself to be a good writer. i just wnat all of your opinions as to whether or not that sounds like a good way to continue the story. because i had no idea how to progress the story and that all appeared one night, and i love it, i just want to know if you all love it too. so that’s that. leave one or get back to me in all the great ways you know how to. thats about it.
peace folx.