[Longaberger] Business Launch E-mail

So, I was able to hammer out a launch announcement a lot quicker than I expected.  Once I got started, it all just came rolling out.  And now, I’m posting it here for opinions and critique before I actually start using it.  We’ll call it a first/rough draft right now – I may make several revisions, depending on what the general consensus is. 

(BTW – if this kind of stuff bores you, I’ll not be at all offended if you skip this and future business entries altogether.  That’s why i’m tagging them with [Longaberger], so you’ll know you aren’t missing anything important.  Except maybe some good info on sales and deals!  lol.)

Anyway, if you read this, let me know what you think.  And if you have any opinions or comments, I WANT to hear them!  I’m all about constructive criticism, especially when it comes to making my business better. 

Hello, Everyone!
 
I’m very excited to announce that I have launched a new business, and I am now a Longaberger Independent Home Consultant! Longaberger offers endless solutions to life’s everyday storage, organizational and entertaining dilemmas with handcrafted, heirloom quality, made-in-the-USA baskets and pottery that last for generations.
 
I’m so thrilled to be associated with such a wonderful company that supports American workers and the American economy, and to share the excitement, I’m offering a special bonus to my first two hostesses! The first two interested parties who book a party with me in February or March will receive a FREE Longaberger basket (valued at $46.00) in addition to all other hostess benefits!
 
Hosting a successful Longaberger get together is easy! Just invite friends and family, provide a place for them to gather for a great time, and I do the rest! And hostesses get the best benefits! Half price merchandise, hostess dollars, and free shipping are all available to you as a successful Longaberger hostess. Not to mention a FREE basket if you are one of the first two hostesses to book with me!
 
Don’t have the time or space to host a party? No problem! Book parties qualify for all the same great benefits! 
 
There are some exciting deals and new product debuts coming in the next two months, and I hope you’ll take advantage of everything Longaberger baskets and pottery have to offer you and your home! 
 
For more information, to browse the current Wishlist and sales items, or to book a party, visit my website: http://www.longaberger.com/heatherharris1 . I’m also easily reachable by phone (***-***-****) and e-mail (HeathersLongaberger@yahoo.com).
 
I look forward to hearing from you and sharing all of the exciting things that are happening this spring with Longaberger!
 
 
Heather Harris
Longaberger Independent Home Consultant
 
 

Okay, the floor is open for comments. 

Oh, I forgot to mention – the booking bonus applies to all of you guys too.  Obviously I can’t travel all over the country hosting parties, but anyone can do a book party from anywhere!  Plus, everyone can shop online safely on my personal website. 

Thanks in advance to everyone who makes it to the end of this entry!  lol.