swirly silver lights
and you spin me around
staring at the sun i see
little swirly silver lights
and you drop me down
falling in the ground where we
once promised to always be there
and I’m changing so much
from that little firl who watched with you
cartoons every afternoon
you’re falling away
from that little boy who fought for me
only to be kicked by me
the next time you look at me
you will see someone harder
someone colder
someone you created
can you look at me the same?
the ink stains my skin
from the newspaper
proclaiming yet another death
another friend that i watch die
and you laugh it off
like theres nothing there
between your ribs and under your skin
i hope you know
i still have a heart
she stole yours years ago
that little bitch
i wish i didn’t have the right
to scream from the rooftops
“I told you so!”
13 stars from Poets.com
You seemed to be really angry when writing this poem. I felt the pain but at times I felt confused. Maybe that’s just my inexperience with writing poems. Reviewed by dmq33
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There is no begining point to this peice however it does show alot of angry emotions You have a few typoe’s to.All in all this could be a very well written peice if it is corrected 🙂 Reviewed by Poeticloveangel
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my friend this is a good poem..very well written and expressed..i sense lots of anger in here..u poured emotions and feelings in this poem..well done and write on 🙂 Reviewed by shylebgal
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I, unlike other people to review this.. actually loved this piece…what a great story… wondering where it led… anyway I used to not capitalize my I’s either and got jabbed for it but now I know it does make a difference…Loved all the lines… Off to read more Reviewed by Tina V
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